Lost

Spool of threadOnce, I knew the way back. A silk thread – such a fragile tether – spooled out behind. But when we reached the heart of things, the thread snapped, severed by knowing: he proved untrue.


This post was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge  weekend prompt: This weekend’s challenge is to write a story entitled ‘Lost’ in exactly 33 words. The word ‘lost’ can only appear in the title, not your 33 words.

20 responses to “Lost

  1. Scriptor Obscura

    I love this story. So beautiful! So well-written. I think that you deserve to win this week. Keep up the excellent work, and I look forward to reading more writing from you! 🙂

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    • Wow, thank you! That’s a real compliment, coming from you. I’m looking forward to reading yours – I think you’re a great writer. I’m just starting on reading through all the Trifextra entries right now – I wanted to hold off till I wrote my own.

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      • Scriptor Obscura

        Thank you so much for your very kind words, I truly appreciate it. Wow. I am so humbled and honored that you should think so highly of what I write here. I really don’t know what to say…You are too kind. Thank you 🙂 I haven’t entered this Trifextra weekend challenge yet, because I just couldn’t come up with anything for this one, and I couldn’t think of anything to write about here…I just don’t feel inspired for this one yet…Who knows, maybe I will come up with something yet…Sometimes you feel really uninspired, you know…Writers’ block, perhaps…We all get it, don’t we, at one time or another…Sigh…

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  2. A really lovely take on the 33 words. Thank you for sharing.

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  3. such a fragile tether

    indeed 🙂

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  4. Christine's Mom

    Scriptor Obscura:

    Lost?
    Really?….”Who knows, maybe I will come up with something yet…Sometimes you feel really uninspired, you know…Writers’ block, perhaps…We all get it, don’t we, at one time or another…Sigh…”

    😉

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  5. I almost can’t stand how good this is. Brilliant writing.

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  6. Nice. Heartbreaking. I really enjoyed this one!

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  7. Fragile heart as the silk thread … awesome 33 words ~~ power with punch! Thanks for the visit and leaving a breadcrumb! :-0

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  8. I love a “fragile tether.”

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  9. And so ends a loving relationship. It seems to me that we always start out with many threads, and it is the snap of that last one we remember most vividly.

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  10. Beautiful story in so few words. Love it!

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  11. Poor Orpheus! I know I already commented, but I came to say I wish we could chat about our entries this weekend. I went with thread as an image as well. I really wanted to talk about how my many moves had made it difficult to keep then”ties that bind” intact. But 33 words proved only enough to hint around at it.

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    • Orpheus – that’s close. I was actually going for a different myth. 🙂 Personally I love these short pieces *because* of the hinting around. I like that there’s usually something left to the reader to guess at, or infer.

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  12. I like this a lot.

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  13. Seems perfect to me! If I were a judge, you would certainly “place or show,” if not win! I so appreciate your visit to my site as well. I am looking forward to participating in these challenges. This was my first one!

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  14. Heartbreaking story told in so few words yet written so lovely… kudos!

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  15. Beautiful. Really lovely response to the prompt. I love that image of the thread ‘spooled out behind’. Thanks for linking up and see you for the weekday challenge hopefully.

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