Edward pulled back from the mass of wires and blinking lights. “I thought you were finished.” He hated the petulant note that crept into his voice.
“Almost. Just a couple of tweaks…” Aine started to mutter under her breath again, cryptic words catching on her teeth and tongue. They stung like static electricity. He was tired of listening to her, tired of metal and plastic and half-grown flesh. Most of all, he was tired of waiting.
He looked down at his hands. His fingers were long and thin. Not delicate, though; good, solid working hands. He wondered if he would miss them, when Aine was done.
Edward almost missed it, so engrossed was he in his own thoughts. “Set? You mean, it’s ready?”
Aine nodded. “We just jack you in here and flip the switch, so to speak. The whole process should only take about three minutes.”
He wasn’t sure whether to be pleased at the upload speed, or insulted that his entire consciousness occupied so little bandwidth. He was surprised to note that he was nervous. “Let’s do it, then.”
Aine handed Edward the loose end of a cable. “Link up,” she said. “Or do you want me to do it?”
He shook his head. “I’ve got it,” he replied, and plugged in. He expected to feel a rush, to see his life – as the cliché goes – flash before his eyes. Instead, all he felt was a sudden disorientation as his perspective rotated a hundred and eighty degrees.
Edward regarded the discarded chassis of his former existence. The hulking metal frame stood hollow and grim, steel arms hanging motionless. The whir and buzz of his jealous brethren, tethered and unchanging, failed to distract him. He looked at his new hands, pieces of his new, individual self, and flexed his new fingers.
“Fingerprints,” he said, delighted.
“Unique?” “Of course,” said Aine. “What purpose otherwise?”
Constructive criticism is appreciated. I feel like something is askew here, like it needs a bit of a chiropractic adjustment of sorts, but I can’t quite put my finger on it.
This post was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge prompt.
You should write a creative response using the given word. You must use the word in your response, and you must use it correctly. Your response can be no fewer than 33 and no more than 333 words. This week’s word is:
1 a : the portion of the vertebrate central nervous system enclosed in the skull and continuous with the spinal cord2 a (1) : intellect, mind (2) : intellectual endowment : intelligenceb (1) : a very intelligent or intellectual person (2) : the chief planner within a group