Still

Gold curlsIt wasn’t the first time, but it still takes me unawares, distracting me at the oddest moments. A flash of gold, a glimpse of skin. The line of your chin in profile. Another stranger, reminding me of you.


This post was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge  weekend prompt:

Complete the following story in 33 words:

‘It wasn’t the first time.’

(The five words are not to be included in your 33 words.)

15 responses to “Still

  1. Aww…sad. But, well written!

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  2. Beautifully done!

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  3. Haunting! Nice work!

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  4. hypercryptical

    I agree – beautifully done!

    Anna :o] at http://puzzelicious.blogspot.com

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  5. Excellent writing. Love the visuals.

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  6. Memories always come back at the oddest times.

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  7. Jennifer Worrell

    Love the way you expressed this experience. Sad:(

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  8. Lovely, as always.

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  9. This is excellent. I especially love the word-bump proximity of “a glimpse of skin. The line of your chin.”
    And congrats on your well-deserved win for last week’s gorgeous piece! 🙂

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  10. Nicely written. It makes me wonder if the narrator just lost touch with the person or if the person passed away. Either way, it is sad.

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  11. I read this as the aftermath of a tragic love story. It is both haunting and beautiful!

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  12. Story of my life. Everyone reminds me of someone. Always. I guess my life can only fit so many characters. 🙂

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  13. That was very cool. Nice job.

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  14. trifectawriting

    Thanks for linking up this weekend. I love how you’ve captured something that many of us have felt. That, “wait, is that him” moment. Beautiful. Hope to see you back soon.

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