Mist

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The way my mother tells it, the mist rose from the ground every morning, creeping through cracks in the cobblestones. That was before we left the city; before my father burned it down.

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This post is loosely connected to the Jade Dragon series. I’ve placed it after the previous installment, but it doesn’t really need to fall there. If you haven’t read any other Jade Dragon posts, I would love for you to check it out. Constructive criticism is always much appreciated. (Edited 3/17 10:00 PM – check it out – there’s a new installment after this one! Unprompted, so if you normally come here from Trifecta, you won’t see this one in the links next week.)

This post was written in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge weekend Trifextra prompt:

This weekend we’re asking for exactly 33 words inspired by the following photo.

Photo credit: Bérenger ZYLA / Foter.com / CC BY-NC-ND

25 responses to “Mist

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  2. Fascinating!Loved the end,with an ominous touch:-)

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  3. I’m guessing he wasn’t popular at the parties. (:

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  4. LOL at Draug’s comment!! 🙂

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  5. I love this. Causes the mind to reel – what happened? I’ve been following your Jade Dragon series – it’s very good – wonderful writing.

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    • Thank you, Steph – that’s super sweet of you! I love hearing that people are actually following this. I have to say, I was updating my little Trifecta Hall of Fame page, which required lots of skimming back through older posts, and I was reminded of how much I enjoy your writing, too.

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  6. I haven’t read enough Jade Dragon. What’s papa done? Why did he burn the city down? I must find out more!

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  7. Perfect! And I’m going to have to set aside time for Jade Dragon, to find out the rest of the story.

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  8. the way my mother tells it . . . beautiful!

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  9. last sentence really makes the piece – leaves a lot to the imagination

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  10. Love this! So much captured in those 33 words. Wonderfully done!

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  11. I really loved this. It definitely made me want to read more about Jade Dragon!

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  12. Oh I love this one!

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  13. Great use of prompt. I like that you use the prompt to connect to a series of posts. http://annbennett2.blogspot.com

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  14. I will have to check the rest out but this was great

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  16. Why did your father burn the city? Seems like a stories waiting to be told!

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  17. This is great! I love this one.

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  18. Excellent. Yours are always among my favorites. This piece delivers. Awesome. Congrats!

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