Take this crude heart. Shape it. Make it shine. Etch your name on my skin and flick your wrist. Each time I skim the surface of something deep, make me think of you.
This post was made in response to the Trifecta Writing Challenge weekend prompt, in which the editors asked us to write exactly 33 words about anything at all.
This week’s challenge is community-judged! If you like my little piece, please visit the Trifecta site starting at 5:00 PM US Pacific (8:00 US PM Eastern) to vote for your three favorites. I highly encourage you to read the other entries – there are some remarkably talented writers over there.
And if you’re in a voting mood, my little story Fireworks is hanging out with only 16 votes over at CausePub. I’d love it if you gave it a read, left a comment, maybe even a thumbs up.
I am one of those people who love quote tattoos, and I absolutely 100% would love to get this tattooed on my personage: “Each time I skim the surface of something deep, make me think of you.”
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*blink* Wow – that *is* a compliment indeed! I’m not sure I could stand to have any of my words tattooed on my own personage, myself. I’m too fickle! 🙂
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I forgot to say: if you do it, send me a picture! 🙂
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Oooohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
*sigh*
Skip me???
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*grin* Exactly. 😉
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Oh. Oh my.
my heart twisted just reading it, I’ve been thinking of old loves recently and this brought me to a place where my heart “knelt” with nostalgia.
it was beautiful my friend.
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🙂 Kir, you always say such wonderful things. I’m glad this meant something to you.
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A beautiful and strong poem
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Thank you, Bjorn – coming from such a strong poet, I am flattered!
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This is quite beautiful!
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I love this!
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Beautiful! Love everything about this Christine!
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this is deep – beyond the skipping of the stone deep. 🙂
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This is beautifully layered and complex. Each time I read it, I find more nuance and meaning. Beautiful.
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Wow – you totally made my night with this comment. Thank you – I’m glad you liked it!
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ah, the same line gave me pause, ‘flick your wrist’. Enjoyed.
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Thanks, LaTonya! I’m thrilled you stopped by. I loved your piece.
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great ending line – fantastic write!
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Thanks Steve! I am truly flattered you think so!
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I enjoyed the entire poem, but in particular, I loved the flourish of “flick your wrist”. Nicely done!
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Thanks, Jo-Anne! It took me a while to find just the right phrase there. I’m glad it worked for you.
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