The Box

“Is it done?”

Another heart in another wooden box, all to please her. I nodded and set it on the dressing table.

Sunlight flickered across her reflected smile. I shivered. I may have held the knife, but her hands bear the stain.


This post was made in response to this week’s gargleblaster question:

Who dunnit?

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27 responses to “The Box

  1. I don’t like her one bit.

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  2. Aw, poor Macbeth.

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  3. oh, MY. This tangles Poe and the Bard, even a little Snow White…and a dark sense of dread. Excellent.

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  4. It was Macbeth’s Huntsman.

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  5. never mind the fairy tales – I just plain loved this 😀

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  6. a manipulative, powerful woman is no match for him.
    He’ll bring her hearts until her own stops beating.
    Wickedly well written.

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  7. This is the best one I’ve read this far

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  8. damn good in so few words. Love.

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  9. That last line really got me. Beautiful work!

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  10. Wow!This is so eerie and dark!Oh what a wicked woman-loved this 🙂

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  11. And I’m shivering too. Such a picture you paint with this, sad and dark.

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  12. Ah, this reminds me of Snow White’s evil queen. Nicely done!

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  13. I love the feeling you create with this, wonderful!

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  14. Getting visions of Vampires. Chilling.

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  15. Perhaps my favorite so far. So dark and vivid. Nice!

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  16. Sounds like this team have quite a collection going. Really good.

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  17. This is really haunting… It told a lot and left me wanting to hear more of the story too.

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  18. I love that you led with the line of dialogue. It made the whole thing pop.

    Great job

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  19. Snow White and the Huntsman? I liked the box and the heart image. Evocative!

    ~Shailaja

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  20. So much in so little space. Good job.

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  21. Oh yes. This one is excellent. Every word perfect.

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  22. i was thinking the Huntsman in Snow White too. Nicely done.

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  23. Ooh, this is so good. Very reminiscent of the original Grimm fairytales. 🙂

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