I have always been the sea. My pulse dances along the crest of every wave. Saltwater fills my veins.
Today my heart flutters in a tidepool’s deceptive tranquility. I crash against the rocks, hoping to reclaim it before you cast your net.
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Christine Hanolsy 
That’s a beautiful way to say I don’t want you to steal my heart, Christine!
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Makes me want to suit up and slip down to the beach.
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I agree with Kymm. That first line is gorgeous. It immediately drew me in. I can picture this vividly…the salt water, the tide pool, the casting net. Just lovely.
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Gorgeous, as always, Christine! First line to die for.
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What I adore here is the language. It’s so lilting, yet full…
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Christine, you have a way with words that is so incredibly emotionally moving…when I read your posts, I so often get this sense of a sweeping epic….orchestrated lyrically and poetically.
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Wow. This was so beautiful. Every line was captivating.
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Oh, I love this! Perfection.
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I loved the imagery of this! Brilliantly written.
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I tried to pick out my favorite sentence, but couldn’t settle on just one. It’s stunning writing–start to finish. Flawless.
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This is so lovely. I was intrigued immediately by the opening line.
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Love the feel of this. I was swaying the whole time.
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This was poetic…and filled with a spectrum of emotion. Well done! ♥
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“before you cast you net” is so poetic, sad and lovely all at once.
even small amounts of water can drown us if we’re not careful. “be safe” 😉
loved this.
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From exhilaration to desperation you managed to capture an entire emotional spectrum with only 42 words. That’s some seriously good writing there.
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Tidepool’s are deceptively calm, aren’t they? I can’t tell if her fluttering heart is anxious or excited…or is it the same thing?
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*five stars* from the serenity of the opening to the urgency of the close.
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This is beautiful! I can see it all happening, right in front of my eyes. The imagery is just perfect!
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This is so poetic and stays loyal to the prompt. It’s hard to pick my favourite line but I think “My pulse dances…” gives a great sense of the mermaid’s free spirit!
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Christine, this wee poem is stunning in its emotional impact. You write with such beauty and poise. Truly, truly lovely.
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