The question is implicit, the answer inevitable. You snag olives off my plate while I pretend not to see. Another man might’ve grumbled, or stolen the cherry from your drink. I steal a kiss instead and make long, lingering plans for later.
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Christine Hanolsy 
Is this a true romance or does he have expectations or some other intent? This is so great! I can’t wait for more.
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So clever, creative, and intriguing. Love your response to the prompt!
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I love it! Wonderful work.
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Oh I’m smiling – like the idea of snagging olives and the last sentence is wonderful. It almost turns the innocent menacing.
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Ooo, interesting. I hadn’t meant it that way, but I see what you mean!
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Lingering plans for later…love that idea.
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I appreciate the consonance you brought to this piece: long/lingering, plate/pretend and the assonance in implicit/inevitable. The detail of him pretending not to notice the thievery tells so much about their relationship. And the ending hints to so much that will come.
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Nate, I’m doing an actual little happy dance here at my desk, because you so obviously got what I was trying to do, both with the words I used and what I left out. Which means, I hope, that it worked. š
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I’m not going to mention the tension, or the plans but I will say that you can always ask the waiter for more olives.
This was really good Christine. You have outdone yourself
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I like the open ended promise of “lingering plans for later”. Makes a person’s imagination run wild. Love the sexual tension you created here.
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Titillating scene. I wonder what else was at the table!
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Sorry, but even strangers can steal olives off my plate and I wouldn’t care. Still loved this!
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I actually hate olives, myself. š Cherries, on the other hand…
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True love, I think, is in the air. š
I like saving myself for later…much later.
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You get a hundred-year pardon for stealing from a thief in Spain : ) Don’t know what you get for doing what long, lingering plans call for… hehe. < 3
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This is lovely! Beautiful words evoke a charming image.
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Evocative word choices. Lovely interpretation, Christine :))
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Love the long, lingering plans and the way you fit so much playfulness in this.
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Very nice combination of abstract and concrete, the implicit question and oh, yes, olives. Love the ending, “…long, lingering plans for later.”
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Pretending not to see. Loved this!
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Olives and cherries. My kinda gal ! Loved this response.
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Haha, banking the favor! You are so good at this. I still find microfiction SO challenging. But you are making me love it, how you can pack such a punch in 42 words!
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