Promise

I don’t mean to set you on a pedestal, to bend your truth back under the weight of my fictions. I lie, again and again, in the hollow of your perfection. This time I will listen when you beg me to stop.


13 responses to “Promise

  1. But your fiction is so compelling. Why would anyone ask you to stop that? 😉 Enjoyed this.

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  2. Love the line “bend your truth back under the weight of my fictions.” It says everything. Always enjoy reading your lovely words, Christine.

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  3. Loved the first line, beautiful handling of the words.

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  4. You always have an amazing way with words. What a talent, truly!

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  5. An enjoyable read. I tend to be a rather verbose writer myself, not knowing when to quit.
    http://openmindedsearchfortruth.blogspot.com/2014/09/gargleblaster-demiurge-responds-to.html

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  6. Love love love the two meanings of this: “I lie, again and again, in the hollow of your perfection.” So good.

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  7. It’s hard to live up to a person you believe is better than you, especially when you love them (more than yourself).

    I was sad at the end of it, feeling the full weight of “stopping” but that’s what made it so eloquent.

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  8. We do that a lot, don’t we? I like how you structured this, as a promise.

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  9. Pedestals mean one thing. The person falls off. As always, your word crafting is stellar!

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  10. Oh, yeah, of course. This time, this time. Love lie in the hollow of your perfection!

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  11. I love the depth of meaning in this. We do so often set people up on a pedestal, diminishing ourselves but mis-reading them as well. No one is perfect but sometimes people seem as though they might be. Beautiful words, with a beautiful flow.

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  12. I love everything about this. Honesty, emotion, vulnerability…it’s all here in just 42 words. Gorgeous.

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