I speak when I should listen. Leap when I should look. I ride the wave of my self-righteousness until it crashes and, drowning, reach for the first hand I see. Now, fist closing on air, I am engulfed: I’ve never swum alone.
I could see the child too busy having fun to listen. As Kymm said, ‘fist closing on air, I am engulfed’ – there is so much to see and feel in those few words.
Beautiful, Christine. I am always diving in the deep pool without thinking about whether I am actually capable of doing so. Over confidence can be dangerous! Love this.
I love the way you suggest depth and layers of meaning with subtlety, leaving it up to the reader to determine how exactly to apply your words to their own life. I’ve read this several times now because I liked it so much!
Sink or swim, there’s only one way to learn.
I often relate to your words and stories in the deepest part of me, I don’t know whether to smile or tear up.
Ken doesn’t know how to swim, huh? I hope this isn’t his death scene. It isn’t, is it? Christine? Is it?
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Well, that depends on whether I meant it literally or figuratively… 😉
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Cruel.
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I could see the child too busy having fun to listen. As Kymm said, ‘fist closing on air, I am engulfed’ – there is so much to see and feel in those few words.
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Well written and a scary experience described perfectly.
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Beautiful, Christine. I am always diving in the deep pool without thinking about whether I am actually capable of doing so. Over confidence can be dangerous! Love this.
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This was one helluva poetic prose, Christine.
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I love the way you suggest depth and layers of meaning with subtlety, leaving it up to the reader to determine how exactly to apply your words to their own life. I’ve read this several times now because I liked it so much!
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*beam* Compliments from you make me so happy. 🙂
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Amazing! Great moral lesson and so powerfully written.
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As a mother, this breaks my heart. I’m going to pretend someone dove in after her. You are so talented at these gargleblasters! The words say so much.
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You just challenged us, how many varied perceptions one can get from these words. Loved that self-analytical voice!
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This is powerful stuff!
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Sink or swim, there’s only one way to learn.
I often relate to your words and stories in the deepest part of me, I don’t know whether to smile or tear up.
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Fist closing on air. So many levels. Great voice here, too!
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Scary! I feel that way when I watch my son at swim lessons.
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A frightening experience, I remember it well.
I enjoyed your take on the prompt.
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