17 thoughts on “Let the rain come

  1. Asha says:

    This is fabulous! The form/shape, the rhythm, the choice of words. Delicious. “I promise if you stay I will make you cry” — wow! What an opener. Stunning.

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  2. Shannon says:

    Well kudos to you for always trying new things in your writing, especially as it’s a boon to those who read them. I still remember the very first piece of yours that I read AGES ago, and you e not yet posted something that didn’t make me say daaaammmnnn when I was done. Loved the last stanza.

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  3. Stacie says:

    This is beautiful. But I’m not sure I get the each line standing on its own thing. I guess with one word it’s automatic but with more words it needs to be a sentence? Or what?

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    • Christine says:

      That was my problem too! I couldn’t even find any good examples online. I made Rowan give me an example:

      Leaves
      pale green
      delicate
      swaying softly
      Spring

      My stanzas are sentences, broken up across lines. It’s supposed to be more like a haiku, sort of? To set a mood, rather than straight up tell a story? I’m not sure. I’ll be thinking on this for a while.

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    • Christine says:

      I’ve never written a shaped poem like this before! It always seemed so contrived. I was aiming for a lanterne, but Rowan tells me I missed the mark a bit. (I was also aiming for a gargleblaster, but this doesn’t really answer the question.)

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