One way out

I fumble for the switch, slap it off. The only light is the flickering of the EXIT sign, staining her pink. I pretend these are your lips, your hands, your teeth digging into my skin. I let her take what is yours.

21 responses to “One way out

  1. I love the imagery of the exit sign. Nice!


  2. Your words are so perfect. I am sad for the narrator.


  3. I like the way you crafted it.


  4. Jennifer G. Knoblock

    I love the exit sign, too…and all those word choices that bring out the savage tone.


  5. Love me some badass writing!


  6. Awesome writing!


  7. I love your ability here to weave beautiful words into a scene that is gritty and raw and full of pain. The pink glow of the sign and the teeth in her skin make it real and immediate.


  8. This brought to mind another song: Strangers/Lovers by Ibenyi. The chorus of which is “These days will be our last.” So I couldn’t help thinking that this was the narrator’s realization and she wouldn’t do it again until it was with the right person. I’m romantical that way.


  9. Perfect title, too.


  10. I definitely love your words and the image you’ve painted. Always enjoy reading your creativity!


  11. Flawlessly crafted in 42 words. Always amazes me how you do it.


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