Dawn is
a bated breath
while I stand by the sea
fog collecting in my lashes
like tears
This little cinquain brought to you by yeah write’s March poetry slam!
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Christine Hanolsy 
I love how the structure of the cinquain is such that “Dawn is” breaks for a pause… just like the bated breath in your next line. I really like the rhythm of your writing and you inspire me to pay closer attention to rhythm and line breaks in my own work.
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful.
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Sheer beauty in your writing
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Beautiful visuals. I am loving cinquains and wondering why I never worked with them before!
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This paints a solemn, tranquil image in my mind… Beautiful!
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Oh, this so put me out on the widow’s walk waiting for my captain to come home.
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I am really enjoying this! Write on, YeahWrite for the March poetry slam. I liked your closing image, tears in your lashes.
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What a lovely image.
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The image of fog collecting made my own eyes teary. Beautiful imagery.
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