No desert is as sere
as empty space. Why do you weep?
This crossing is not free.
It never was; not free,
not without cost. You wander sere
and barren galaxies; I weep
and wonder, did they weep,
the stars, when spacetime set them free
to wander skies so sere?
Too sere, my heart. Love, weep no more: fly free.
This tritina brought to you by:
Christine Hanolsy 
Beautiful! Oh how I’ve missed tritinas. Love your use of “sere.”
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I asked Rowan for three words. I almost hit her when she gave me “sere.” It’s not an easy one to work in. 🙂
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Funny, I seem to remember Rowan complaining of something similar. It’s always the hard words that end up making the piece!
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“Why do you weep? This crossing is not free. It never was…” Too often we forget that the very best adventures in our lives cost something. The most enjoyed lives are those spent in adventures for which the cost is recovered as we enjoy the journey. This is a powerful reminder to me to keep enjoying the adventure, and accepting the costs as I pay them. It’s worth it! Thank you for sharing this.
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Thanks for reading, and for your comment! I love what you got out of it. 🙂
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I have learnt something new today, tritina. Thanks.
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I am hooked on them!
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^^she’s an iambiphile. Love the image of stars being separated from each other.
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Oh, you perked my interest in the tritina. Never heard of the form until now. I’ll have to try it out myself. http://goo.gl/K9fTpT
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I love them almost as much as I love sonnets! Give one a try and bring it to yeah write! Nab: tritina a don’t need to be iambic like this; I just have a thing for iambs.
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“Too sere, my heart. Love, weep no more: fly free.” The way you weave the emotions and words together is just beautiful.
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Thank you, Ira!
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“…did they weep, the stars…” Beautifully sorrowful.
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Thanks, Meg – that’s kind of what I was going for. There’s deep sorrow behind this one, for sure.
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I love the spareness of this, how it fits the subject. Also the playing with meanings of “space.”
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🙂 Thank you! This one percolated for about three weeks before I could shape it. Some bits fell together on their own, and others I really had to work for.
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