Lilith

Her kisses are light: all heat and smoke. She trails them like promises across my skin, each one an ember that quickly turns to ash. She is a candle, a hearth fire, a beacon; I am the one who burns.


26 responses to “Lilith

  1. This is evocative, and beautiful. I have missed your writing. And I still miss Trifecta.

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    • I’ve missed yours, and Trifecta too! YeahWrite’s micro challenge is my attempt to channel the spirit of the old Trifextra prompts. 🙂 (Psst – there’s still time to add a micro. I’d love to see you here!)

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  2. This is so legato, in such a lovely way. When I read it my voice doesn’t break at all. ❤

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  3. What a passionate metaphor. Nice!

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  4. You can write a love scene like nobody else. It’s erotic and passionate and flows like honey.

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  5. Wow, this flows so well. “I’m the one who burns”- Lovely!

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  6. Beautifully written! Love the kisses that are all heat and smoke.

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  7. Oh what a brilliant use of transferred imagery! The sensuous nature of the scene is not lost on the reader and yet, the protagonist is the one who speaks not the one featured. Oh, LOVE this.

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  8. First of all, I love the sensuousness of this,
    Secondly, I must be hungry because I accidentally read “beacon” as “bacon,” which took my thoughts in a totally different direction…

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  9. I love reading about love, and this one is just perfect. 🙂

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  10. A potion of love and passion is what your story is and it asks to be read again and again.

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  11. “promises across my skin” wonderful image of a lovers gentle kisses.

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  12. You may have just turned me straight

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  13. Well, now I’m burning. Happy now?

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  14. I wish I had your skill with words. I just loved the almost musical tone this had.

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  15. I’m glad I wrote and published my micro before reading this. Otherwise, having been reminded of your beautiful, evocative way with words, I would have chucked the whole thing.

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  16. I love the progression from a candle, to a hearth fire, to a beacon. It’s like the narrator is self-correcting as they bring their beloved into clearer focus in their mind’s eye. Your word choices are simply exquisite.

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  17. Not to make this about me, but I’ve been struggling to create a complete story in 750 words lately. And I read this and saw an entire universe in such a short space. I’ve read it several times and am still discovering moments and possibilities.

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    • … Wow. This is an amazing compliment. I’m a little overwhelmed. 🙂 Thank you so much. I hope you keep writing! Do you hang out at YeahWrite? Forgive me – I don’t recognize your blog name off the top of my head! If you don’t, swing by and say hello. It’s a great place to get some practice. (Also, OMG I was the BIGGEST Trixie Beldon fan when I was a kid!)

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  18. Donna-Louise Bishop

    This is just so profound and poignant. So many questions asked but it’s also possible to decide on your answer. Very deserving of the top pick this week.

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